Simple bliss
poem by:
Edward Shields
Written
on Dec 31, 2016
A piece of paper, floating! Drifting through the air. Like life, going through the motions. Expectations. Not knowing what's happening. You & me, doing what we have to. To survive in this world. This world ablivious to nature. We have to hear, to see. What we are doing to this land, the sea. The air we breath. Blackening the sky. Dark rain, falling! falling! falling! The earth burning, trying to survive the poison of man. And the putread human nature, of simple bliss!
Tags: fear,
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Christopher Russon commented:
Nice poem.remind me of a song I heard on the sixtys
It's good news week bye Hedgehoppers anonymous.
Piya Paul Mudgal
commented:
Serene and surreal
Cecilia Crasto
commented:
We need more people like you, to care about the preservation of this planet, seems like a losing battle, good work.
ann parks
commented:
What on earth is "ablivise".... (this world abblivise to nature)perhaps you mean oblivious...
Edward shields
commented:
Thanks for your comment. I don't mind criticism, it helps me to try and write bettor poetry. Obviously you can't!!!
Arch Angel
commented:
I think organization will make this piece more linguistic. There are some spelling errors. What is ablivious anyways? Perhaps you mean oblivious?
A previous user
commented:
Not concerned with spelling. Its the message recieved. We should show this rock we live on some respect. I like the message
Maria Williams
commented:
I like this poem, very well written
Nicho Mose
commented:
Great word. most times we're our own worst enemy. 9/10 of the time...
Frank Hornby .
commented on Oct 04, 2017 at 9:57pm
Mankind is the earths worst enemy.....good poem
