k river
commented on Jul 26, 2020 at 9:42pm
Hi
Your poem, has a really good overall premise and the rhyme is fine up until the last three lines. Because of the word "tool" the other two lines that need a rhyme ending would be very easy to do. The other thing you need to keep in mind is the syllable count. The syllable count is what determines the overall flow and polish of the poem. The place to go to learn about how to write poetry totally for free is the web site:
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I look forward to becoming good friends with you and reading your critiques of my poetry or prose as submitted work.
Best regards,
K River