A previous user
commented on Mar 11, 2018 at 9:08am
I am my own hero... If I don't try to save the world... Who will?
k river
commented on Jul 26, 2020 at 11:37pm
Hi Ronell,
This could be a very good poem the things that need to change are: reverse the position of two lines: "nothing stays the same" and the next line: "possess a heart of courage." Just exchange their positions.
The other thing is syllable count, Not the number of words. The word count itself should not be more than ten word each and every line. If it goes much more than that it becomes more prose than poetry However, there is a form called Prose Poetry. Typically, based on what I have observed, it seems that seven or eight syllables per line seems to work best for the flow and meter of the type of poetry you are writing here, not always but a good part of the time.
This is only a guess based on reading only two of your writes. However, I bet I can tell a quite bit about you just from your writings: I think as a little one most likely your mom or an adult female or older sister gave you a love for books by reading to you stories, later you discovered reading on your own the escape it offered and finally education. You grew up mostly loving school and learning new things. Based on word choice alone I would say you are fairly well educated with one or more college degrees maybe several but I am pretty sure you have at least one or maybe you are still working on one. You highly value education, because of all the available knowledge you could extract and the wisdom to be gained from school. My best guess is that you are involved in some sort of teaching whether as a professional or as a volunteer. You have a natural proclivity toward teaching. This natural teaching aptitude if I am guessing correctly, gives or has given you some of the greatest satisfaction and joy in your life.
If you are married and have children you are a natural mother and have very good instincts because of what you have learned from your mom or the main adult female in your life. You have an above average intellect that is displayed well here in your writing endeavor. You know the valuable importance of hard work along with the rewards and challenges it brings with the accomplishment of set goals. Therefore, you are probably most likely a very goal oriented willing to take on the responsibility of being in charge and a natural leader when in a group. I would bet you have a kind gentle nature and are very patient when teaching. I believe that patience is exhibited when you find a student is struggling to understand a concept or solve a problem. You will do everything you can to help them, util they do succeed in finding a resolution to the problem at hand. The reason is you understand that it could very well be a defining moment and change their life for the better.
I did this sort of for fun This of course, is all strictly just conjecture on my part. It is the first time I tried this. I hoe I did NOT offend you in any way that was definitely not my intent.
I was wondering how close I came. I will be very interested to read your response to all my supposed observations about you not having ever met or seen you before. All, none, or some of it might or might not be true I really have no idea. I hope it will be an interesting and fun thing for you to think and read about I know it would be for me.
Best regards,
K River
k river
commented on Jul 26, 2020 at 11:39pm
Hi Ronell,
This could be a very good poem the things that need to change are: reverse the position of two lines: "nothing stays the same" and the next line: "possess a heart of courage." Just exchange their positions.
The other thing is syllable count, Not the number of words. The word count itself should not be more than ten word each and every line. If it goes much more than that it becomes more prose than poetry However, there is a form called Prose Poetry. Typically, based on what I have observed, it seems that seven or eight syllables per line seems to work best for the flow and meter of the type of poetry you are writing here, not always but a good part of the time.
This is only a guess based on reading only two of your writes. However, I bet I can tell a quite bit about you just from your writings: I think as a little one most likely your mom or an adult female or older sister gave you a love for books by reading to you stories, later you discovered reading on your own the escape it offered and finally education. You grew up mostly loving school and learning new things. Based on word choice alone I would say you are fairly well educated with one or more college degrees maybe several but I am pretty sure you have at least one or maybe you are still working on one. You highly value education, because of all the available knowledge you could extract and the wisdom to be gained from school. My best guess is that you are involved in some sort of teaching whether as a professional or as a volunteer. You have a natural proclivity toward teaching. This natural teaching aptitude if I am guessing correctly, gives or has given you some of the greatest satisfaction and joy in your life.
If you are married and have children you are a natural mother and have very good instincts because of what you have learned from your mom or the main adult female in your life. You have an above average intellect that is displayed well here in your writing endeavor. You know the valuable importance of hard work along with the rewards and challenges it brings with the accomplishment of set goals. Therefore, you are probably most likely a very goal oriented willing to take on the responsibility of being in charge and a natural leader when in a group. I would bet you have a kind gentle nature and are very patient when teaching. I believe that patience is exhibited when you find a student is struggling to understand a concept or solve a problem. You will do everything you can to help them, util they do succeed in finding a resolution to the problem at hand. The reason is you understand that it could very well be a defining moment and change their life for the better.
I did this sort of for fun This of course, is all strictly just conjecture on my part. It is the first time I tried this. I hope I did NOT offend you in any way that was definitely not my intent.
I was wondering how close I came. I will be very interested to read your response to all my supposed observations about you not having ever met or seen you before. All, none, or some of it might or might not be true I really have no idea. I hope it will be an interesting and fun fascinating thing for you to read and think about I know it would be for me.
Best regards,
K River
k river
commented on Jul 27, 2020 at 12:01am
Hi Ronell,
This could be a very good poem the things that need to change are: reverse the position of two lines: "nothing stays the same" and the next line: "possess a heart of courage." Just exchange their positions.
The other thing is syllable count, Not the number of words. The word count itself should not be more than ten word each and every line. If it goes much more than that it becomes more prose than poetry However, there is a form called Prose Poetry. Typically, based on what I have observed, it seems that seven or eight syllables per line seems to work best for the flow and meter of the type of poetry you are writing here, not always but a good part of the time.
This is only a guess based on reading only two of your writes. However, I bet I can tell a quite bit about you just from your writings: I think as a little one most likely your mom or an adult female or older sister gave you a love for books by reading to you stories, later you discovered reading on your own the escape it offered and finally education. You grew up mostly loving school and learning new things.
Based on word choice alone I would say you are fairly well educated with one or more college degrees maybe several but I am pretty sure you have at least one or maybe you are still working on one. You highly value education, because of all the available knowledge you could extract and the wisdom to be gained from school. My best guess is that you are involved in some sort of teaching whether as a professional or as a volunteer. You have a natural proclivity toward teaching. This natural teaching aptitude if I am guessing correctly, gives or has given you some of the greatest satisfaction and joy in your life.
If you are married and have children you are a natural mother and have very good instincts because of what you have learned from your mom or the main adult female in your life. You have an above average intellect that is displayed well here in your writing endeavor. You know the valuable importance of hard work along with the rewards and challenges it brings with the accomplishment of set goals. Therefore, you are probably most likely a very goal oriented person willing to take on the responsibility of being in charge and a natural leader when in a group.
I would bet you have a kind gentle nature only strict when necessary and are very patient when teaching. I believe that patience is exhibited when you find a student is struggling to understand a concept or solve a problem. You will do everything you can to help them, until they do succeed in finding a resolution to the problem at hand. The reason is, you understand that it could very well be a defining moment and change that person's life for the better.
I did this sort of for fun This of course, is all strictly just conjecture on my part. It is the first time I tried this. I hope I did NOT offend you in any way that was definitely not my intent.
I DO NOT believe in nor am I involved in anyway in any fortune telling or any of those types of activities at all. What I have attempted to write here DOES NOT involve any of that kind of thing at all. It is all just strictly my observations, conjectures and hypotheses.
Best regards,
K River
I was wondering how close I came. I will be very interested to read your response to all my supposed observations about you not having ever met or seen you before. All, none, or some of it might or might not be true I really have no idea. I hope it will be an interesting and fun fascinating thing for you to read and think about I know it would be for me.
Best regards,
K River